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CORRECTION
Today, I want to talk about my family.
My family is 4. There are parents, me and youger brother.
- My family has four members; my parents, me, and my younger brother.
My hometown is jeju island.
- My hometown is in Jeju Island.
When I was 20, I moved to busan because of the university.
- When I reached 20, I moved to Busan to study in a university there.
Because My parents are far from here, I always miss them.
- Because my parents live far from here, I always miss them.
My father has a tangerine plantation and works in agriculture.
Mother is a broker who introduces farmers to a wholesale dealer.
My younger brother is a university student.
My family influences my personality. At all times, parents respect and support my opinion. And they make me feel responsible about that.For that reason, I can be a independent and responsible person.
My dear Sunny,
Here are the corrections I made for your story. As you notice, there are only minimal corrections. Because of that, I am so
very proud of you because you can really write good in English. Keep up the good work and I'll see you in class. Have a nice
day Sunny. Take care ^^ |
