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Hi GD!
Kindly go over the revisions below! Thank you for your efforts!^^ Keep up the good work!
I studied an article in this morning about nuclear weapons.
>>> I studied an article this morning about nuclear weapons.
If those countries which equip with nuclear weapons make an agreement for nuclear disarmament, the world would be less dangerous.
>>> If those countries equipped with nuclear weapons make an agreement for nuclear disarmament, the world would be less dangerous.
Of course, they would still fight each other as if they did that in the past.
>>> But there's still a possibility that they'd fight with each other like what they did in the past.
Nevertheless, nuclear weapons must be disappeared because they destroy not only their enemies but also our environment.
>>> Nevertheless, nuclear weapons must disappear because they not only destroy their enemies but also our environment.
>>> Good usage of "nevertheless" ^^
By the way, to achieve world peace, I think it doesn’t need something great.
>>> I think that we don't need something great to achieve world peace.
It’s OK that we just keep our universal values, laws, regulations and morals.
>>> It’s OK that we uphold our universal values, laws, regulations and morals.
Most of them are not difficult such as respecting each other, not harming other people, keeping traffic rules and so on.
>>> Most of them are not difficult, like respecting each other, not harming other people, following traffic rules and so on.
Our governments should protect the people trying to those values.
>>> Our governments should protect the people trying to uphold those values. |
